writing of the girl and the mirror

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Today I will be showing you what we have been doing in term 2 for writing. let's turn we have learning how to write a strong narrative. A strong narrative is Believer, descriptive and consistentwe can describe the sitting  the characters.

Today we sick sentences. We change boring sentences into strongest descriptive sentences.

Here is one boring sentences:

Anna sat down.

My strong narrative sentence:

Anna set on the uncomfortable cuoled concrete.

This is the picture we use to write from

Here is my story.

She had found it lying alone, deserted, abandoned in the attic. After making the discovery, Anna had gazed and marvelled at it for some time. Where had it come from? Why had no dust settled upon it, as it had done over everything else that resided in her attic? A layer of the thick dust blanketed the attic floor, and as the sunlight glared through the attic windows, the dust particles yet to settle were illuminated as they hovered in the stuffy air. Yet, the mirror looked flawless, untouched by age, not a finger print in sight. Anna propped the mirror up against one of the thick, timber beams that jutted from the attic floor. Settling down into an uncomfortable position, on the cold concrete she tentatively placed a finger against the glass the mirror wobbled and a fall on me I went through and can I ended up inside a world of Fire. I saw someone big and red. He was mean and scary. I am the evil you from the evilest telling your ever seen toun behind me you'll see a lot of other people if you touch the mirror you’ll end up here . 

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